User blog:Berglund/Writers Help 1 (using other words than said)

She said this, he said that. Said is a normaland boring word. Oneof teh many words when we right was may over use. Thus this dosen't add any emotions to what teh character actually said (See! i used it again!)

Here's ay example from my upcoming Fan fic

"The Maze runner."

Example 1 using said's
Iris was still asleep,

"She needs to get her lazy Arse up." Gally said

he stood their frowning.

"according to legend," Chuck started to say

"Girl's have to have their beauty sleep or else they'll wake up and look like trolls." Chuck smiled at Gally and Thomas,

"Just wake her up!" Gally said

"We never let Teresa sleep that long."

"Gally!" fry pan said from outside the shack

"It's 4:00 in the morning!"

"The birds are chirping and the sun is singing!" Gally said

"You say that all the time...." Frypan said

"be original dude."

Gally picked Iris up

"Hey!" Iris said

Her yell's were muffled by the blanket that Gally carried her in.

gally threw her down into a pool of water.

"What the heck?!?" Iris said

"You need get up Greenie, you WILL work!" Gally said

"GALLY!" Newt said

"She's with me, she will help me not you. We're working in the fields today." Newt said

Newt grabbed Iris's arm and dragged her to the field.

"I'm sopping wet..." Iris said

did anyone else fall asleep? I did, said is so boring, here's the original version of that without the word said
Iris was still asleep,

"She needs to get her lazy Arse up." Gally whined

he stood their frowning.

"according to legend," Chuck started to say

"Girl's have to have their beauty sleep or else they'll wake up and look like trolls." Chuck smiled at Gally and Thomas,

"Just wake her up!" Gally yelled

"We never let Teresa sleep that long."

"Gally!" fry pan called out from outside the shack

"It's 4:00 in the morning!"

"The birds are chirping and the sun is singing!" Gally fussed

"You say that all the time...." Frypan sighed

"be original dude."

Gally picked Iris up

"Hey!" Iris yelled

Her yell's were muffled by the blanket that Gally carried her in.

gally threw her down into a pool of water.

"What the heck?!?" Iris fussed

"You need get up Greenie, you WILL work!" Gally yelled

"GALLY!" Newt called out

"She's with me, she will help me not you. We're working in the fields today." Newt explained

Newt grabbed Iris's arm and dragged her to the field.

"I'm sopping wet..." Iris growled

Better
Wasn't that so much better than the first? bottom line, don't use said. It's a dead word, just burry it lat it in theground with the other bad things that can make a bad story.Here's a chart of words you can use other than said!